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You Wish. by ~hitchcockm00:iconhitchcockm00:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Fixed


You Wish.

People drowned in clear blue eyes,
Now they flee from stormy skies,
Your soul is hard to recognise,
Blue turns grey as happiness dies.

Soft pink lips beg to be kissed,
Replenish the feeling they've bitterly missed,
Every word they speak is dismissed,
Slowly loosing the will to persist.

Wild hair remembers the past,
Partying hard and driving fast,
Crazy nights you knew wouldn't last,
Never repeated, never surpassed.

Happy thoughts escape your mind,
You know the world is never kind,
Anger and hate have turned you blind,
Disguising the happiness you wish to find.
©2005-2009 ~hitchcockm00
:iconhitchcockm00:

Author's Comments

I searched through Micxx's gallery: [link] looking for a picture to inspire a poem.
I chose the picture "You Wish." [link]

This is basically a poem about the sadness I see in Michaela's eyes in this picture.

Comments and faves are greatly appreciated as aslways.

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:icontinsel-wig:
~Tinsel-Wig Sep 11, 2005, 8:50:50 AM
I love it.

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:rose:I Beg To Dream And Differ From The Hollow Lies:blackrose:


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:icongaiash:
~Gaiash Sep 11, 2005, 10:52:08 AM
whoa nice. If I form a band I'd want you to write songs for us

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Way too many people have these copy and pase notes in their sig, if your are one of the few that don't FOR THE LOVE OF GOD "DO NOT" PUT THIS IN YOUR SIG!!

Proud Advanceshipper (Supporter of Ash and Mays love)
:iconmicxx:
~Micxx Sep 12, 2005, 10:21:42 AM
the use of words i think are very effective and well used in your poem. the way things flow and fit together is also very affective. i think its a brillaint poem, i only have improvement you can do, make it longer! when it finished i wanted more and it felt like a story and i wanted to know what was going to happen. Or maybe you know the poem you were writing on the phone will go with it? if i can remember rightly its similar flowingness. anyway, prints poem. :p.

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When kisses are just favours returned.
:iconhitchcockm00:
~hitchcockm00 Sep 12, 2005, 1:02:22 PM
Thanks alot :D
I'd be honoured, tell me if you ever do form a band and I'd gladly help out.
:iconhitchcockm00:
~hitchcockm00 Sep 12, 2005, 1:07:36 PM
Thankyou very much :D
I'm glad it flows well, I was hoping that the rhyme scheme would help it flow more than alot of my other stuff.
I may make it longer. I also thought when I read it back that it should be longer but I couldn't think of a way to make it longer without it sounding forced or something.
I'm not sure if it would fit with that poem, I dunno where that is though. I'll look for it and find out.

Wow printing hehe. I feel honoured :D

Thankyou again for the billiant comment :D
:iconmicxx:
~Micxx Sep 17, 2005, 9:07:57 AM
you're very much welcome. knu-knu-knuckle.

i don't know maybe the shortness also shows the loneliness of the girl in the poem.

hehe great.
you're welcome.

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When kisses are just favours returned.
:iconhitchcockm00:
~hitchcockm00 Sep 17, 2005, 3:18:48 PM
goood. hehe yaay. FRICK!! haha

Yeah maybe. I probably will make it longer sometime. Maybe you could help me tomorrow.

yes, don't be sarcastic hehe.

gdgd.
:iconfarfrmperfect:
~FarFrmPerfect Sep 18, 2005, 6:07:29 PM
This is possibly the best poem you have ever written! I love this.

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Your heart understands what your head cannot yet conceive; trust your heart.
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