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I Could Be by ~hitchcockm00:iconhitchcockm00:

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I Could Be

I could be a genius if I could think for myself,
I could be a musician if my guitar left the shelf.
I could be an artist if I learnt how to draw,
I could be selfless if I didn't ask for more.
I could be perfect if I didn't have flaws,
I could be caring if I didn't have claws.
I could be intimate if I controlled my hands,
I could be a servant if I listened to demands.
I could be an angel if my halo wasn't bent,
You could be my devil if you weren't from heaven sent.
©2005-2008 ~hitchcockm00
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Submitted: April 26, 2005
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Just thought of the line "I could be a genius if I could think for myself" and took it from there. I like the first line the most. Not so sure about the rest. Havn't written for a while so that's y this isn't very good.

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~AtmosphericBliss:iconAtmosphericBliss: Apr 26, 2005, 1:00:37 PM
on the contrary, i really like it.. all of the lines are well thought of and it all fits together.. very nice =D
~Amorette:iconAmorette: Apr 26, 2005, 1:11:44 PM
oh wow thats got great imagery in it well done, its a fab poem
~digiblue:icondigiblue: Apr 26, 2005, 1:40:50 PM
oooh i liiiiiiike it
read fast + strum a guitar
yehhhhhhhhhh

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~bouncing-splitpin:iconbouncing-splitpin: Apr 26, 2005, 2:06:09 PM
yay, i like it very much! I think my favourite bit is the art and the selfless line but its all good!
=developedfilm:icondevelopedfilm: Apr 26, 2005, 3:23:55 PM
i agree.. the lines form together great. beautifull poem.

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~hitchcockm00:iconhitchcockm00: Apr 27, 2005, 4:24:57 AM
yay :D thankyou very much :D

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~hitchcockm00:iconhitchcockm00: Apr 27, 2005, 4:25:37 AM
:D thankyou very much

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~hitchcockm00:iconhitchcockm00: Apr 27, 2005, 4:27:48 AM
yay :D
Thankyouuuu :D

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~hitchcockm00:iconhitchcockm00: Apr 27, 2005, 4:32:10 AM
Thannkyouuu :D

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~hitchcockm00:iconhitchcockm00: Apr 27, 2005, 4:33:48 AM
thankyouu :D

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Muse Rock
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